I need a content writer for storyboarding

I am an aspiring film maker. I have a story line with me that casts a very strong woman as the lead in the movie. I wanted to pitch this line (including the storyboarding) to one of the directors. But, due to lack of prowess in language, it is taking too much time to write and also there are too many corrections in my writing that ultimately is diluting the eloquence of the punchline. Here is an excerpt from the story: -------START-------- She walked into the hall 10 minutes before the exam commenced. Each second before her entry felt like forever, and those 10 minutes just sublimed like camphor. I kept staring at her all the time, not as an ogler but as an admirer. 20 minutes past the scheduled start, she submitted the paper which startled the proctor. "Hey! It's not time yet. You can't leave the room." "I have inked the paper enough to pass the exam. Now, if leaving costs me anything worse, I don't care. 'Cause I've got higher priorities." He caught her by her arm as she just passed the door. He loosened the grip, as she turned back and started returning. She headed towards the proctor's table and tore her answer sheet. She left the room but this time, none went to stop her. The whole fucking room was in stupor. I was the first one to come out of the shock and leveraged that of others, submitted my sheet, and left. I ran after her and kept stalking her. She took an auto rickshaw. I too took one and instructed the driver to just follow her. I understood that she never bargained the fare when she gave as much that filled her hand, without counting those notes. It was the city railway station, where she got down. She went to the ticket counter and took a ticket to Hyderabad. I followed suit. I boarded the same train, and the same coach as hers. I was observing her from a distance through the voids in the crowd. I waited and waited but the angst in my guts didn't let me keep myself from talking to her. I treaded many feet through the air tight crowd and finally reached her. "Hi! I'm Raj. Your senior from Mechanical Department", I introduced myself with tremors in my voice. "Hi! I'm Yamini". Her voice was deep like that of a lioness. "I have seen you going away mid-way from the exam. Are you in an emotional trauma? Like is there any emergency at home or something of that sort, if I can ask you?" "No. Nothing as such." "Okay, my bad. Why would anyone tear their exam sheet? Should be something very grave at home, yet personal. But I found you very interesting since Phani sir's incident. So, I involuntarily ran after you just to talk to you. Maybe next time, in a better situation..." "Hey stop speculating! I am traveling Hyderabad to watch 'The Evil Dead' which didn't release here". "What the fuck? You forgo an exam for a movie? Are you crazy?" "You boarded the train for me, right?" "Yes, but..." "We both are not just in the same train but also on the same boat. Come on man, you are as crazy as me. I'm sure the only difference is that I have torn my paper, but yours will be torn by your answer sheet examiner". A smile on my face came as an inevitable reaction to that. "'Crazy' is what people use loosely for every behavior that's socially unacceptable. We are just passionate people being called names". I almost ejaculated on that note. -----END----- So, my story is going to be in this tone. Please reach out to me if you are interested in working with me to write the other parts.